Feedback on project 3

I received very helpful feedback- I will incorporate more conversation elements into my piece, experiment more with the sounds of breathe and different rhythms that I can create with breathe, incorporate ambient sounds (perhaps kissing), and extend my conversational exploration of death. Also, while recording I have to be more careful about range because my voice got clipped on alot of the recordings. I have to reduce the volume and be farther away from the microphone. I will take out the parts that repeat words because it doesn't really make sense to my concept.